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Long sentences containing a number of ideas, usually connected by and's, are confusing. Sentences should usually contain only one central thought. Overloaded sentences shuold be broken into smaller sentences.

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I went into the kitchen late at night for a glass of milk and I noticed that the basement doorknob seemed to be turning, and I panicked until I found it was only the cat, and I remembered she had learned to turn doorknobs.

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I went into the kitchen late at night for a glass of milk. I noticed that the basement doorknob seemed to be turning. I panicked until I dound it was only the cat. Suddenly I remembered she had learned to turn doorknobs.

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