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OK this is the essay, it's about the book/movie - 'the boy in striped pajamas'' -

Please help me for I'm not very good at writing essays.

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> Its about the boy in striped Pajamas~

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> The boy in the striped Pyjama's is a book/movie about a nine year old boy

> (called Bruno). Who is completely oblivious to the things happening around

> him in Auschwitz (Out-With) during World War II.

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> The main character is a nine year old boy called Bruno; he is the son of a

> strict commander of a Nazi concentration camp. He has a stubborn, strong

> headed sister called Gretel (who Bruno likes to call 'Hopeless Case').

> They lived in a five story house, until his Father got a promotion and

> suddenly Bruno, Gretel, His Mother and Father had to move to Auschwitz.

> Bruno's grandmother is not happy about the whole ordeal about Hitler and

> the Nazi's and she doesn't like her son (Bruno's father) being a Nazi

> himself. When they got to the new house in Auschwitz Bruno was angry and

> disappointed by the fact that the house was only three stories instead of

> five, another reason that Bruno is sad and angry is because the house is

> so small it barely leaves any room for exploring (a hobby of Bruno's), he

> also misses sliding down the tremendously long banister at his old house.

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> From Bruno's bedroom window (because of which he has to stand on top of a

> box to look out of), he spots a fence with people in striped pyjama's

> behind it. At first Bruno thinks it's a farm and he tells his parents

> about it. His parents, a few days later come to an agreement that Bruno

> and his sister Gretel need a tutor for their education, so they hire a man

> called 'Herr Liszt'. Bruno thinks that Herr Liszt is the most boring

> teacher one could ever have, because he teaches geography and history

> instead of the arts, which Bruno prefers to learn. Bruno, out of boredom

> and confusion wonders what is going on at Out-with (Auschwitz) and why the

> people behind the fence are always dressed in striped pyjama's over there.

> One afternoon Bruno decides to go exploring, what he finds is a boy, a

> Jewish boy named Shmuel. Bruno had never heard the name Shmuel before but

> apparently it was quite common among Shmuel's own people. He soon becomes

> Bruno's friend and Bruno goes to see him at the fence every afternoon and

> they talk. Bruno is told by his sister that the people in the striped

> pyjama's on the other side of the fence are Jews and that he and his

> family are "the opposite to them". Shortly after this, Bruno and Gretel

> get a bad case of head lice and Bruno has to shave his hair off. This

> makes him look more like his friend Shmuel and he starts to doubt what

> Gretel said about them being "opposites" and finds himself thinking that

> they are not that different at all really.

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> The story starts to end with Bruno having to leave Auschwitz (out-with)

> and return to his previous home with his mother and sister, he had been in

> Auschwitz for almost a year now and Bruno and Shmuel have been talking

> nearly every afternoon. Bruno, not particularly happy about the whole

> concept goes and tells Shmuel the bad news, when he greeted his friend he

> finds that Shmuels father (a watch maker) had been missing, Bruno told

> Shmuel the bad news about him leaving to go back to Berlin, then Bruno in

> the spur of the moment planned that both of them would look for Shmuels

> father the following day like it would be a big adventure, Bruno told

> shmuel to get him some striped pyjama's so he could be in costume,

> (because, in Bruno's mind, every good explorer needed a costume). The

> next day, Bruno dug a hole under the fence and climbed under it over to

> the other side where Bruno put on the striped pyjama's and went with

> Shmuel to look for Shmuel's Father. Bruno and Shmuel walked through the

> camp for a while looking for Shmuels father, and before long it started

> raining and Bruno started to wish he was back at the house, he told Shmuel

> that he should be going back now but Shmuel told Bruno that Bruno had

> promised him that he would find his father, this made Bruno think because

> he had promised Shmuel this and a good explorer never goes back on his

> word. So Bruno and Shmuel walked into a 'house' and then a guard blew a

> whistle, Bruno (who was quite confused at this point) and Shmuel were

> pushed into a gas chamber in which they had to strip and go into a sealed

> room, Bruno and Shmuel held hands and a light shone down from the roof as

> a person with a gas mask chucked a gas grenade into the chamber, both

> Shmuel and Bruno die because of this.

The book ends with Bruno's mother, father and sister looking for him. His

sister noticed that there was a piece of bread on a box leading out a window, Bruno's father immediately went out the gates following the trail

that Bruno had followed every afternoon for nearly a year, he got to the fence and saw Bruno's clothes laying on the grass and he saw the hole that

was under the fence, he ran along the fence line to the gate and he ran

into the concentration camp and looked for Bruno, Bruno's mother was

running along the trail as well, but when she saw Bruno's clothes she

cried out in grief, Bruno's father had looked for Bruno everywhere but not

the gas chamber, he saw the chamber and he screamed out Bruno's name, his mother heard it and she cried even more.

Another View:

As an instructor of English at a university I should ask, do you know what an essay is? Is this supposed to be an essay or a book report? An expository essay goes into the material and you draw conclusions based on the book's assumptions, setting, theories or its use of dramatic themes. You develop a thesis, such as, The boy in the striped pajamas was a mirror by which Germans can feel the pain of a single senseless loss of life can bring and compare it to the six million Jews lost during the Holocaust. Then give three reasons from the book, explain how they support your thesis. Five sentences per paragraph, five paragraphs long. That's an essay. What you wrote is a synopsis, a summary, a book report showing you saw the movie or read the book.