Is this a good Common App Short Answer response?

Answer 1

Since birth, I have been addicted to one drug: music- strange arrays of chords and notes that release dopamine from our brains. I thrive off of the Beatles, inject myself with the Beach Boys, and crave intriguing new sounds. This stimulant has its withdrawals; I often have songs rattling inside my skull and a deep desire to hear the latest tunes. I have spent the past six years cultivating my love and obsession of music into the exquisite art of mixing. I take my favorite songs and gently lay them next to each other on one track, then fuse them together into one coherent form. This recreation is not simply for my personal satisfaction; I have played some of my songs for little children with issues such as Audio Processing Disorder so that they may some day regain full hearing. In addition to these free shows, I have put up an assortment of my songs for download online, with all proceeds going directly to charities such as Sound Seekers and Rhythmix. I try to follow the words of Mark Twain: "Kindness is the language which the deaf can hear and the blind can see." Sound is such an integral piece of my life that I cannot imagine existence deprived of it, so that is why I create chords for the aurally disabled.

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