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Cassandre Gibson ∙
jin wang
Those sentences that are simple and direct speed up the pacing.
"prickly dark"
The curtains dragged heavily to the ground, the view from the glass obscured by a fog of neglect. (APEX)
Dialogue between characters
interesting verbs
To earn points from the Campfire Girls
A cough
Atmosphere and mood -apex :)
she runs to meet the bus and eats her apple
to get points from the Campfire girls
Frenzy and panic
She hears the sound of a woman cough inside the room
The rules of reality that govern the story
She sees that Addie is crying.